Fortune City Chapters 1 and 2 {Adut Rating}

[menchi]

Warning: The Following Episode contains scenes of an Adult Nature which some younger viewers may find offensive

Yay it's here, WAR-Games 3rd production comes into town and it's a violent one too, enjoy

Story: About two hitmen hired to kill each other, they must meet up in the deadliest city on earth, Fortune City, Set in a fictional United States, two men, two similar adventures, one outcome

Episode Guide: it's a rainy night and the two hitmen start off their adventures, meeting all sorts of annoying people along the way to anger them even more, but can they deal with it

try not to be too freaked out by the Two stories

Episode 1 Cast

Jericho: Menchi
Spike: WPT1031
Taxi Driver 1: The Jester
Taxi Driver 2: Scarlotte
Bartender 1: Crotalus
Bartender 2: Tali
Guy in Bar: Renken
Newspaper Salesman: Klaymen1
Newspaper Saleswoman: Tarakitten
Station Master 1: The Jester
Station Master 2: SaintKevin
Mother: Tali
Daughter: Fruitchew
Father: Kowai Tenshi
Son: Matthew Cowlrick

media.putfile.com/Fortune-City-Chapter-1-The-Beginning {Stream}

media.putfile.com/Fortune-City-Chapter-1-Commentary {Featuring Menchi and WPT1031} Sorry if theres alot of Weird sounds coming from Either Skype or Phones Rinning or anything else, and yeh our two voices are at different pitches, it's because we tried out this New add-on to skype and i'm still getting to grips with it, Hope you like

23 minutes 10 seconds

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Chapter 2: The Contact

Story: Our two travelling Hitmen are now getting ever closer to their meeting to kill each other, with babes, bullets and badguys along the way

Cast:

Jericho: Menchi
Spike: WPT1031
Kate: Fruitchew
Rose: Noa
Motel Receptionist {Story one}: Tamashii
Motel Receptionist {Story two}: Djeu
Drug Dealer: Tsixin
Prostitute: Suzaku
Cafe Owner {Story one}: Tsixin
Cafe Owner {Story two}: Ayame-Chan
Customer 1 {Story one}: Djeu
Customer 2 {Story two}: Menchi
Customer 1 {Story one}: Cagalli Yula Ahtha
Customer 2 {Story two}: Menchi
Weather Reporter and Commercial: Menchi

Duration: 25 minutes 4 Seconds

media.putfile.com/Fortune-Cit...-2-The-Contact {Stream}

rapidshare.com/files/4843263/...xdown.mp3.html {Download}

Enjoy

All Chapters Created, Produced and Written by Menchi

[Cyke]

NYEEEEEEEEEEEEEE~! I'm a younger viewer~! > ___ <
But I checked it out for you anyway because I am such a niice nicety~!... XD

Weeeeee HITMAN~! I'll go ahead and critique Episode 1 now... ^_^

I was just a bit confused in the beginning because you lacked some SFX, like what the main character was doing (walking?) and some random bar noises like random people chatting.. Those little bits, I find them to add a certain atmosphere, a certain chaaarm... mmmm... everybody looves charm... Gimme some charm, heeheehee~! Some background music would also be really great for this one, I mean, specially for this un~! Maybe use some blues, jazz and whatnot~! I personally think that would be perfect for this radioplay you have here~!I recommend that there should be a clear distinction between the character's narrating voice (maybe a slight echo) and his actual voice since it does get confusing specially after he narrates then gives his lines. And.. uhm... I find the main character to be a bit chatty.. I mean, he talks a lot for a hitman though... I don't know if that's just the way it is but I think he shouldn't have too much thoughts because he should only be thinking of his main priority: his target. Like he should be elaborating his plans about his target and people are just disturbing him and stuff and he'll just keep on going back to his thoughts.. I dunno if that is what you're achieving so I'll leave it like that for now. ;D

Well, I'll end my Episode one comment here~! I'll be commenting on Episode 2 soon~! XD